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請幫我修飾一下我的英文自傳


qqlulala wrote:
以下是我自己翻譯的英...(恕刪)
uh..google cover letter
版主您好:

1. I've graduated from (學校名稱). My major is civil engineering.

我畢業於(哪間學校),我主修土木工程。
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建議可以寫出在學校或前任工作有甚麼成就(accomplishment),學到甚麼?在學校有加入甚麼社團?當中學到甚麼?(團隊合作:team working,溝通經驗:experience about communicated)

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2. MY interested is photography, reading, cooking, flower arrangement and gardening.

我的興趣是攝影,閱讀,烹飪,插花與園藝

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可以寫一些您是如何紓解您的壓力,像是 I'm reading to release my stress (我藉由閱讀來紓解壓力),以及自己的個性(personality)

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3. I keep studying English in order to be a good boutique sales. Although my English isn’t very good now, I still keep practicing English in order to reinforce my English skill.

為了當一個好的精品銷售員,我持續研讀英文,雖然我現在英文或許不是很好,我仍然持續練習英文來增強自己的英文能力

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建議您寫一些具體作為,像是報名英文補習班,或是每天讀英文報紙,聽ICRT,TED演講,訂英文雜誌等等

4.Thanks for your patience in reading my self-autobiography.

最後感謝人資官閱讀您的自傳


小弟最近也在應徵工作啊...面試無外乎都是問在學校或工作的經歷,有沒有參加社團,介紹家庭,人生遇到最大的挫折是怎麼解決的,興趣等等,希望有幫助到您!

young74 wrote:
版主您好:1. I'...(恕刪)


你真是我的好朋友~~給你一百個讚~~~
謝謝你這麼用心的幫我修正~~
我再努力改一次


ps.我現在有砸錢在補英文~~
加強自己的聽力~~~~

不知道您是要找哪類的工作呢~????
版主您好:

you can write

I applied English cram in order to reinforce my English ability.
我參加英文補習班來增強自己的英文能力


在找業務...脫離22K的人生
qqlulala wrote:
Hello~

I graduated from civil engineering
at the building.

Holidays
i like photography、read books、cook、flower arrangement、gardening.

Because i want to be a boutique sales
so i study english very seriously
now is'nt good
but i hope i will say english is better

Thank you for reading my resume
Wrong place to invites advice.


談不到文法
這是哪門子的自傳....
就算是中文的也是0分

你要表達這種內容乾脆不要寫
qqlulala wrote:
以下是我自己翻譯的英...(恕刪)



你可以先把中文寫出來嗎?光看你寫這幾行講真的,有點不知道重點是什麼耶.

連中文自傳都寫不好,更不要講英文自傳.

另外寫這幾行,說真的幫助不大.


Dear Sir/Madam,

I graduated from (學校) with a degree in Civil Engineering.

My interests include photography, reading, cooking, flower arranging and gardening.

I am studying English as I want to be a boutique sales who can serve and communicate with foreign customers.

Although I am still not fluent in English, I am practicing very hard to improve.

Thank you for taking the time to read my autobiography.


估狗大神, 奇摩姿勢佳有很多比較常用的範例

建議你多參考格式, 語法, 再帶入自己的資料
看完很想問樓主是哪個學校的
學那麼多年英文能寫出這種東西真不簡單
而且還是有花錢去補習的唷

台灣的英文教育真是太神奇了



qqlulala wrote:
好吧~既然大家都建議不如不要寫~那我就拿掉吧@@(恕刪)


不要,不要,千萬不要拿掉!
尤其是HELLO,亂親切的!!

這位仁兄,我不知該如何跟你說比較好了!!
黑皮~~
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